The air was fresh and the water crystal clear: the smell off the ocean, salty and refreshing. I sat down on the beach relaxing to the morning breeze. Sounds of children laughing and competing, sounds of the water splashing around. The taste of strawberries filled my mouth a delicious, chewy, and freezing drink. When I close my eyes there were sounds of bustling and talking. Here no one had fear no one experienced fear. The sound of music laying resonated with my soul. My eyes were transfixed on the serene ocean and everything felt surreal. I have always felt a connection with water it always brought out my true emotions. A wave of nostalgia hit me it reminded me of those times when I was a kid and was always so reckless and came back all muddy but always with a smile. A little boy not over 5 yrs old surprised me out of my thoughts he gave me a exquisite flower that he probably got from the park only 2 kilometers away, it contained beautiful variety of flowers, different species of animals, and a shop for snacks. This is my perfect home.
I really like your story, its really descriptive and how you use words, it just really works with the story (if you know what i mean). But, I think there are some parts that sound un-necessary, like "not over 5 yrs old".
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