It was morning, and I'm standing where there are birds everywhere. The sky was fresh and plain with a red rounded circle making a shadow of me. I started to fill the space around and sweet my mouth with fruits. Fruits piled up like a bunch of leaves falling down to the ground. I grabbed it. I could feel crispy and cold in my tongue raised up a sharp aroma through my nose as I breathe. Now my nose was fresh and I felt like a group of cloud went passed into my nose.
Very descriptive, I really like the use use of shadows. I think you should change "It was crispy and cold and it's sharp perfume rising up and reached my nose." Instead of perfume, you should aroma or fragrance.
ReplyDeleteI like the use of metaphor and personification in your writing :)
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