The sun was shining bright on the blue sky. Trees were waving as if they were dancing along with the wind. Everything seem to be a happy day for everyone but..happiness never last long...
In deep forest where many trees cover the sun couldn't reach in. A small hut hiding away from human and animals eyes there was a frugal witch living. Her little cat with black as night fur and shining like star eyes. The witch immense into the book while the poison in big pot was heating up. Little cat running around trying to catch a mouse but it accidentally bump the pot and the poison spill out before the whole pot fall down and break!...
I like your story. You used a good amount of literary device to fit the story, and I also like that you left a cliffhanger. But I think you need to improve on the way you used the vocabulary words, (it sound weird) and some minor mistakes on grammar. (Poony sleepy syndrome)
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