Tuesday, October 28, 2014

The night of Frights ( Emma's Story/ B Day writing)

In the middle of the night, on October 31st, right in the middle of the deep dark forest of Gloomeria, where a graveyard lies silently.A sudden cry came out, at the centre of the deadly graveyard with the  feeling and sentiments of  blood and bones. Trees blew from side to side with the moon shining bride down towards the graveyard with a bereaved essence of a corpse. On the floor where the leaves have fallen and some torn pieces of a wedding dress covered in crimson liquid, still warm and fresh as if an onion had only been picked. It was quiet and full of sorrow with a tint of beauty as little drops of water fell from the exquisite sky above. Suddenly, the water droplets stoped falling, and the wind blew harder, then a glow game from a distance on the horizon. Then, every single creature curled up in a little ball as if it was nearly too frightened to open their eyes. They cam upon a horse, it was a beautiful horse with black hair and brown eyes with a tint of lust in them. Trailing behind the stoic horse came a man, but he was not a normal man, he held a knife in his hand, and his head seemed to be surreal. Of course it was not a normal head, but it was a bright orange pumpkin. He was wearing a pair of black trousers, a white shirt and a black suit jacket. He looked like the kind of Halloween creature that would kill u and eat your organs, but as we know from long tales of the Halloween frights, it was Jack 'O Lantern.

Next B day
To be continued................. 

1 comment:

  1. Good story. I liked how you create the tone very clear and is put together as a story. One thing though, you need to include more vocab words in a sentence.
    Also a story is likely to have speech marks and dialogue between characters.

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