Breaking news! Liesel Meninger arrived in an unknown town with her brother dead.
She is on her way to meet her new foster parents with her 6 year-old brother. Liesel, about to turn 10 soon, is on the train with her dead brother and a pair of guards. In her dream, she was attending a rally of Adolf Hitler. She looked at the skull colored part of his hair and his square mustache. She stopped dreaming and woke up. Her route to Munich was stopped due to faulty track work.
Great start Mue, but you need to finish by recounting here discovery of her brother's death. Keep an eye on the verb tenses in your writing. You want to make sure you are consistent with them or the reader may get confused.
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